What do you think of these stories? + Titles?
Wish Upon A Cloud:
Prologue
Two
girls….
One cloud…
and one adventure…
Best friends Elizabeth and Sammy have to save the world from the notorious
Ruler. With the help from Cloud and Blue Skye, they finally reach the Ruler’s castle where they
have to defeat the Ruler in a deathly battle. But, can they do it? Find out
NOW!
Chapter one: Once Upon a Time
Once Upon a Time there was a girl who had a pool filled with tacos. She
didn’t like tacos, though, she liked pie. So, she wished upon a cloud that the pool was filled
with pie instead of tacos. A giant chicken came out and pecked all the tacos
out.
“Well, at least I got half my wish!” said the girl, whose name was
Elizabeth.
A robot came and danced a little in the pool, and barfed up enough pie to
fill the whole pool. She was so happy that she jumped into the pool and got covered in pie. She
wanted to eat it all! She made another wish upon a cloud that she could eat all of this pie. All
of the sudden she got really hungry and gobbled up the whole pool of pies.
“I’m bored now!” Elizabeth said as she got out of the
pool.
She went inside, picked up the phone, and called her best friend,
Sammy.
Sammy lived in Wisconsin, five states away from Washington, where
Elizabeth lived, so they never really got to see each other.
“I wish Sammy was here!” Elizabeth said while she waited for Sammy to pick
up the phone.
Sammy popped out of nowhere.
“Sammy! I’ve missed you so much!” She ran over and hugged
Sammy.
“Sammy, quick make a wish upon that cloud over there!” said
Elizabeth.
So, Sammy did – she
wished that the pool outside was filled with melted chocolate. It was warm like a chocolate
hot tub. It
was the perfect end to the perfect day! Little did she know, it wasn’t over
yet.
Untitled: Okay, so
I’ve got this idea for an awesome story, but I need to know if I should continue writing/write it at
all. I’ve only written the first two sentences (Long ago, in the land of the Greek, there lived a boy
named Phoenix. Phoenix was but twelve years
old.) and chosen the names (Evilum, Phoenix, and Artemis). Here’s the
idea.
Phoenix is a twelve year old boy,
living the normal Greek life. But, all of a sudden, this big “box” falls out of the sky. This “box” is
actually a time machine, but Phoenix doesn’t know that.
Phoenix walks
in to investigate this fallen box, that’s when Evilum appears (he’s evil, but loved by many). Evilum
grabs Phoenix, blindfolds him, and takes him to the year 3005 (where Evilum came from). 3005 was
supposed to be the year of flying cars and time machines, but it still stayed the same :boring, with
nothing new. Until Evilum invented the time machine, that is. No one knows about his time machine, yet.
Someday Phoenix would become a god, that’s why Evilum kidnapped him: so he could be the father
of a god.
OK, does that sound
good? Evilum would have to do some other time-y whime-y stuff to make Phoenix an
orphan.
Thanks in advance,
Alyssa
Thanks, Kelsey! Wish Upon a Cloud is meant for kids, so ‘cute’ is a good
thing
Okay, I will! Thank you, I think your story will be really good. Good luck
to you, too!
@Everyone: I need a
title for the Phoenix one, what do you think will work?
AAAAH! Kelsey, I can’t email you, nor can you email me! Neither of us
have the ‘email’ button on our profiles! AAAAH! How can we fix this?!